I translated and uncensored this doujinshi from a bundle of other doujinshi’s. I’m not proficient in japanese so I tried my best to translate it, so it sounds ok in English. I don’t know if the author was ever gonna translate it themself, but I went ahead and did it my self while I was uncensoring it.

The original: https://eh.makinico.moe/g/2714541/04d347fcb8/

Terrible translation. You butchered one of my favorite doujin. Reported and blocked!!!

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Truthfully, it shows you need an editor.
Cause it's not even about being proficient in Japanese, but this also shows that you're not proficient in English either.
First page: "Monica" and "Monaca", so errors are already showing up right away.
Page two: "Excuse my I have to run an errand."
That should have been corrected to "Excuse me! I have to run an errand!" or "Excuse me! I have an errand to run!"

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"your" and "you're" are different words.

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